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May 07, 2011

~ the pic became our... the home became our... ~

On Feb 6th, I penned my first post for Blog-a-Ton, the journey has started here, and seen few Happy Moments after 'Goodbye, and 'Return' and few tear filled moments after the results of 'Mystery' and 'Journey', finally this post won in 'Blog-a-Ton 20' organized by Blog-a-Ton. I thank all the sweet hearts for pushing me to win with their GOLDEN VOTES... Thank you thank you thank you...

This post has been published by me as a part of the Blog-a-Ton 20; the twentieth edition of the online marathon of Bloggers; where we decide and we write. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following Blog-a-Ton.
Why I am feeling so cold? Why it is too dark here? Why my whole body is numb? Shit... I am unclothed. Oh, God what happened to my clothes? This is horrible Riti... Riti... don’t play with me idiot… Riti... Riti... Riti… Riti… Ritiiiii... Rit…Rit’, my voice trembled, hands shivered as it was grave silence inside the house whereas a storm cleaning the city outside.


Let me switch on the lights’ I said to myself and went near the board, ‘Shit there is no current… Riti... Riti... Riti… Riti… Ritiiiii... Rit…Rit, don’t play with me please…’ I turned back to search her in our living room and found someone lying there… Riti... Riti... Riti… Riti… Ritiiiii... Rit… Rit I shouted but she didn’t respond… ‘Lighter’ my instincts suggested but Shit… ‘Why the hell I quit smoking?’ I searched for a matchbox, lighted the candle in no time and found her lying.

Riti... Riti....’ I went down, took her in my hands, and found her heartbeat was missing. ‘CPR’ my instincts said, but nothing helped me to bring her back alive. ‘Riti Riti... Riti... Riti… Riti… Ritiiiii... Rit…Rit Riti…’ I cried aloud, pain, unbearable pain it is. God… you had cheated me… God… ‘Police, I should inform about this to police’, I heard someone knocking the door, my blood stopped, and the knocking sound increased in no time. They broke the main door open, came running towards me, ‘freeze-freeze’, they said and pushed me down. ‘Police, go down’ they locked me with a handcuff. ‘Why did you murder her’, one of the police officers shouted at me.

No I didn’t’ I screamed but they didn’t hear my response instead one of them knocked me with his gun... ‘No I didn’t... believe me… Riti… Rit’ I fell unconscious, and the beautiful moments with Riti captivated my senses and I faded.


*****

Slowly I was gaining conscious, ‘Where I am… Riti’, ‘Hey stop your non-sense’ one of the police officers warned me. ‘I can’t I didn’t murder her’, ‘you...’ One of the police officers came near me, ‘Hey, this is ACP Arun, why did you murder her?’, he said, ‘No I didn’t murder my angel.. please believe me,’ I said, he turned back and said, ‘Where are the forensics & autopsy reports?’, ‘Sir, it is here’. He re-read the report twice and looked at me with puzzled eyes... ‘She died of heart attack?’ he puzzled, on hearing him my heart stopped for a second. ‘I can’t believe that she has been raped before she died, shit’, he said, ‘may be they would have had sex’ one of the police officers said, and they had a conversation on how to close this case. They laughed at times; finally, they decided to close the case concluding she died of heart attack and to let me free.

Bala, one among those stopped them, enquired about the phone call, ‘it may be anonymous call’ Arun said and ignored Bala; ‘you look innocent, aren’t you?’ Bala said, ‘I am… you said someone informed you’, ‘it is an anonymous call. You will be out of this place soon’ Bala said and left the place. The judge declared me innocent in the court and they closed the case stating ‘She died of heart attack’.


*****


Hey why don’t we go out for shopping’, Neha messaged me, ‘No not interested’, I replied, and saw the image clicked by us lastly in my mobile. How beautiful my home was on that day, the rain drops on lens helped to create a mystic environment and how wonderfully it was clicked by Riti. This is where our love started; this is where we dreamt of our life, this is where she breathed her last, this is where she still lives in my heart. I still remember Riti complaining about someone else presence in our home but I took it easy. We planned to spend the whole night in our home itself.

Why don’t we have some juices?’ she said, ‘Why not?’, she went inside the kitchen to prepare juice for us. ‘Hey idiot can you come here for a minute’, she came scolding, 'You won't let me to prepare juice?" I ignored her, showed the image we clicked and how good it is. Suddenly we heard some weird sound in the kitchen, Riti became nervous and I convinced her saying it must be a cat. I went in and brought the juices to have a juice treat. Sip by Sip, we consumed, started to blabber something, and became unconscious.

*****

What happened to us on that day? Why we became unconscious? Who else was there in our house?’ I repeatedly questioned myself, immediately an answer flashed, ‘Is that the guy who tortured Riti to love him? Who had informed police about Riti’s death?’ these questions puzzled me, ‘it could be…, my instincts suggested’

Suddenly I heard a familiar voice, Riti... Riti... I yearned, ‘Hey it is Neha dear’ she said entering my room. She felt bad on what happened to Riti and tried to cheer me up but I ignored her and still deeply thought on what could have happened on that day. ‘Dear, please cheer up’, ‘you know how much I miss her. I don’t have words to express’ I said, ‘may be but it is good to move on’ she said and left the place with a sad face. I felt bad for upsetting Neha, without her, I wouldn’t have met Ritika, my Riti. I closed my eyes to cherish the sweet memories we had in our office.


*****

Hey Sid, stop, do not pour water on me’ Neha screamed but I didn’t care instead I poured water on her but luckily she moved and the girl sat behind her became the victim. ‘Sorry Sorry Sorry’ I said some thousand times to her, she said, ‘its ok’ and resumed her work. ‘She is a beautiful girl’, ‘of course she is, Riti, a new joinee,’ Neha said and we both resumed our work. ‘Riti, a nice girl…

*****

Neha once again came to my house, ‘Sorry to hurt you’, ‘Sorry, it is my mistake. Hey can you prepare coffee for me’ I said, ‘yes I will’ she went inside the kitchen. After ten minutes, ‘the coffee is ready’ she said smiling, and she cracked some jokes to make me smile and her try was success indeed.

We heard someone knocking the door, ‘Come in please’ I said, ‘Hi Sid this is Bala, hope you remember me’ he said, ‘I do’ and smiled. ‘Do you remember what exactly happened on that day? It would help me to find who the real culprit is’, Bala said. ‘I don’t remember exactly on how I became unconscious but when I woke up I found Riti dead’ Bala interrupted me shouting, ‘Don’t act smart, do you think that the case is closed and you have escape after murdering her’. ‘Bala this is the limit, I don’t want to live itself after losing her’, ‘Sir, please leave the place, don’t make him tensed. I am sure he wouldn’t have killed her’ Neha said. ‘Then why the hell Riti had consumed Ketamine,’ Bala shouted, ‘will you please leave’ Neha shouted, ‘you black sheep; I will prove that you are the murderer’ and he left the place.

Tears came rolling down my cheeks, ‘How much I love Riti? Why should I murder her?’ I kept on murmuring this, Shockingly
Siddu, I miss you dear Neha spoke in Riti’s voice. ‘Riti…’, ‘yes I know you love Riti more than anyone else, I know about you better’ she said. I was confused, my phone ringed, ‘Yeah John, I will be coming to office from Monday’ I said and hung the call. Neha received a call from her mom and she left the place in no time.

*****

Neha - my sweet friend, Riti – my sweet life and my senses captivated with those sweet memories we had in office, the memories when we felt we are destined to be friends and how Riti came in to our life, how I proposed her Riti,

‘My hands told me I’m shivering with fear,
When I only thought of saying it to my dear!
Heart became restless and sounded louder,
Seconds before, it was as silent as falling powder.
Thoughts crept into the mind with great force,
Confused, and stopped it from thinking, of course!
I would imagine that future, a few hours away;
That would burden it with my past straightaway.
Carrying an untold love is heavy, indeed;
Courage, real courage is what I need!
Hiding my fear, or hiding myself in fear,
I came to you and looked at you, my dear.
That very sight quenched the restless senses,
Which were thirsty for that real courage!
I became my natural self, totally myself;
And realized you were surely my real self.
No words said, I saw the ‘heavy’ love,
Getting dissolved in us as it reached you!’

I mailed this sweet poem to Riti to propose my love, ‘Sweet Memories’.

*****



With tears I went for a walk and while coming back I shockingly found a small bottle ketamine lying near the back door of the house, ‘Ketamine?????’, I rushed to my bed room, cross-verified her autopsy report and searched in Google how deadly the drug is? ‘Oh God this is a murder, a cold-blooded murder’ I said to myself.
I phoned Neha, said what happened on that day, Riti, and I felt someone was here in the house but we ignored. I can relate it a lot, as Bala pointed out about Ketamine in Riti’s reports and now I found the same in our house. ‘Do you mean it is a murder? But the reports say she died of heart attack. I am confused’ she said, advised me to sleep now as we will discuss about this tomorrow and hung the call.

But… I couldn’t sleep as she advised… in my mind I was thinking of Bala, his words, 'She has been raped and she has comsumed ketamine', but I could not remember any of those. I felt very cold as there was heavy down pour outside and suddenly water started drizzling via roof and fell on Riti’s favorite teddy, which I gifted on her birthday.


*****

On seeing the teddy, I recalled those sweet memories, a surprise gift, a poem to wish on her birthday,

‘The Blue Sky with thousand trillions of stars,
Sweetly twinkled on the Milky Way;
The Morning blossomed thousand millions of daffodils,
Dancing and smiling in the gentle breeze;
Cuckoos started singing Unchained Melody,
With Bees composing Celtic music;
I wondered why this been happening, but
Silently the God's sweetest child set foot on earth;
It is her sweet birthday, and
She sweetly assured she is my gift’

Shockingly the teddy called me 'Siddu' and on hearing it, I fainted in no time.

*****

I woke up little late and realized Riti wanted to convey something to me. I quickly browsed on how to interact with Ghost and found a website called www.ghost-mysteries.com, read about ghosts, medium and the dark truth after death. In addition, many techniques to chat with ghost or to converse with ghost. One of them being the board technique, other via medium they use to convey the message they want to say to this world and the last is the camera technique to find out what it wants actually. I decide to visit the Ghost library before trying out any techniques.

I found a mentor there who helped me learn the techniques to interact with Ghost and how they convey the things they wanted to share. I tried the same after reaching home, and was little successful as the board showed the letters, ‘S’, ‘E’, ‘B’, ‘L’, ‘V’, ‘A’ ‘O’, ‘V’ and she stopped as we heard heavy knock at the door.

Bala! Come in’ I welcomed him, I enquired about the call and learnt the call came from a telephone booth which is 10 KM away from here and it came just two minutes after Riti’s death which is practically impossible and it was a girl’s voice. He also said that he realized that I am not the murderer after analyzing, and warned me to be aware. I thanked him, also conveyed about the Ketamine. This info made him violent and fired up to find who is the real criminal.

Would that be the guy who loved her badly?’ I am confused, so once again tried to speak with Riti but she didn’t instead her teddy shed tears. Oh God, I rushed to the teddy to wipe out the tears, my phone ringed, and it was Neha, she kept on talking for almost three hours, later she disconnected the call, as she was sleepy. But I couldn’t so I went out for a walk at twelve in the night and while returning back I found a syringe lying our gate with few drops of blood inside it.

I phoned Bala, ‘I found an injection with a few drops of blood in it near my house gate and I am sure it is used by a person who doesn’t know how to use it.’ I said, ‘I will come there in half-an-hour’ he said and hung the call. He reached my place in less than half-an-hour, collected the syringe, blood sample and sent it to lab in less than ten minutes. We received the call from lab and shockingly the lab reports revealed that the blood sample matches with Riti and the syringe walls contains the salt (KCL) i.e., Potassium Chloride.

Bala and I searched in Google about Potassium Chloride, found about ‘Lethal Injection’ and one of its kind is Potassium chloride, which when injected to a person may die of heart attack in less than five minutes, also the salt will evaporate from the body in less than half-an-hour resulting in no clue of murder. We are in complete shock after reading this and assumed the murderer would have used the same technique to kill Riti. But what is the motto of the murderer? Is she a girl or a guy? Confused we are… as we don’t have any clue on who would have killed her. Tears came rolling down my cheeks, Bala helped me with his kerchief, and ‘I think it should be guy who proposed him in her college days. He was desperate about her.’, now tears came rolling down from Bala’s eyes, and ‘I am the one who proposed Riti in her college days. I never want to kill her instead; I wanted her to live happily, even now, I am here because I want to find that bastard’, he said and left my place.

I was very much upset thinking of Bala and so started working on the clue Riti gave, and found it to be ‘S’, ‘E’, ‘B’, ‘L’, ‘V’, ‘A’ ‘O’, ‘V’ – BALA LOVES ME. I couldn’t sleep or stop thinking about the murder so I phoned Neha, informed about Bala, the way the murder happened and invited her to my place next day.

I opened my tired eyes on hearing the knock, opened the door, and it was Neha. She came in, enquired about what happened last night. She was shocked after hearing Riti was murdered and Bala was his lover. I requested her to prepare coffee for me and she did so, we sat in the dining hall and sipped our respective coffees. After two sip, ‘Siddu,’ Neha spoke in Riti’s tone, without any second thoughts I made a video call to Bala so that he can keep the call as a evidence.


Siddu, it was Neha who came to our house on that day,’ 'Neha', I shivered, ‘yes she came to our home, mixed Ketamine in our juices when I came to see the image clicked by us. Without knowing it, we drank it and fell semi-conscious. She covered my mouth with a cloth and revealed how much she loves you and how happy she was before I came in to your life. She wants you and for that, she wants me to die. She made us to have sex, and she injected me the Lethal Injection and it led to my death. She left the place once I breathe my last and on her way to her home she informed police about the murder,’ Riti said, I was in complete shock and tears came rolling down his cheeks. In the mean time, Bala informed his team and reached my place to save me.

But before they reached…(click here to know what happened)

Riti, Rit... I want you, I want to live with you....’ I cried, shouted, but I could hear her cry and no more words. ‘Riti…’ I became semi-conscious… ‘Riti came out of Neha to help me’ but…

You dog hereafter you shouldn’t live in this world. You now know all the secrets and that is why I mixed Ketamine in your coffee alone.’ Neha shouted, and she injected me a heavy dose of Lethal Injection. With my Riti’s thoughts, I went down, and the beautiful moments I spent with Riti captivated my senses and I breathe my last. Riti shed tears as she couldn’t save me or stop her, as she needs a medium to re-enter her body again.

Now it is your turn

Picture became our Monument
Home became our Grave.
Bala arrested Neha for murdering Riti and me and his tears were answered. The picture we clicked lastly became our monument and our home became our grave. ‘Long Live True Love

Moral: If you love someone, then love him or her whole-heartily and even your love fails, do not hate him or her as it may lead to another Neha. ‘Long Live True Love’

The fellow Blog-a-Tonics who took part in this Blog-a-Ton and links to their respective posts can be checked here. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following Blog-a-Ton.

Credits
Image - Window Rain Drops by Eric Alder
Courtesy - http://www.deviantart.com/ via http://www.blogaton.in/

Image - Tears Guy, Eyes are found via Google - Autopsy & Ketamine - SiS

I whole-heartedly thank every single individual who read this long post completely. Thanks for your patience and I hope you enjoyed reading this post…

73 comments:

  1. @ SomeoneSpecial

    Whatelse..I you would expect me to say...buddy pen down your novel...I mean it!!

    The post ws awesome...not even ones i feel boring...there ws a curiosity driving high..liked the game place the sketch of the scene around the picture!!

    Great reading ..must say!! Indeed you made grt efforts in making it look real...through the reports shown. Highly commendable!!


    ~Keep the Spark ALive..

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  2. I completely agree with Rachana. The post was awesome, the images speaks a lot. wonderful justification on using the image, the way it started, her sudden death and closing the case as Nature death, then the flash back.

    First you made us assume the person who love her in college would be the one who killed her, next the coffee, ketamine usage, the autopsy report was fantastic idea.

    totally a post worth winning any contest. I wish you to win, and you increased the curiosity by hiding the climax, Someone is Special, the romantic verser, awesome.

    Hats of, love, bala

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  3. Beautiful story. Loved it. You have really improved as a writer since I read your time travel story 1 year back. The narrative has come out real level and you have put in real efforts researching chemicals and all. By the way, I have noticed in some of your previous stories also you have named your heroine Ritika. That name is special to you seems like.

    I have a feeling this time's Blog-a-ton crown is going to be your.

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  4. A lovely blog; a welcome treat for readers. :)

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  5. My My .. this was totally something unexpected .. At first I had thought that you had made it like another heart breaking love story , but this was shattered as i moved on. The report, googling Ketamine everything just made the fiction sound real ... Saravana, this is the best fiction I have read from you!! Awesome .. You have put in great efforts and lots of hard work is reflected through your story ! I hope you get crowned this time ! Best of luck !! :)

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  6. Wow....such a prolific writer Sis..Painstaking research on ketamine and KCl. Fiction at its best. Good luck with Blog a ton Crown:)

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  7. Hey There,
    Your story was so believable what with all the info on Ketamine, the Autopsy reports! I liked this better than the rest of your posts. And the suspense was killing :) I think you still need to pay particular attention to your Sentence constructions and grammar, without which, I'm sure, your story would appear much more nrilliant. I think you will win this B-A-T :)

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  8. @ Rachana Shakyawar

    Aww, thank you so much Rach.... Hmm, my novel is 75% complete and I hope to self publish it soon. And whenever you visited me, your comment boosted my morale. Such a sweet friend you are...

    Glad it derived you with curiosity and I know the ending would have added more fuel to it. Happy you like the overall sketch.

    Thank you so much for recognizing my efforts so much. Happy Man...

    Someone is Special

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  9. @ bala

    Sir, Welcome once again here. Glad you love the post and the image used and created. I am very happy that you love the entire idea. Thanks for appreciating me so much...

    I wanted the readers to be in the story and to think who could be the one who killed her. and Glad it came out well...

    Happy Man if I win but I never had luck in my way when it comes to Blog-a-Ton and nowadays I am not expecting to win in any contests because when I expect to win and if I lose, it hurts me a lot, demotivates me and keeping me away from blogging world atleast for a week.

    So Expect Less and Smile More is my mantra now,

    Happy the idea of hiding the ending increased your curiosity. Thank you so much for all the appreciation. Happy Man...

    Someone is Special

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  10. @ The Fool

    Aww, TF, your comment have boosted my morale and Glad I have improved as a writer from my post, "Time Travel", one year back.

    Thank you for appreciating my efforts in researching about chemicals and other stuffs. and Ritika is a name I like a lot but the name "Isha" is always close to my heart.

    If your prediction comes true then I would the most happiest man in the world but I don't have luck to back up my hard work (perfect example Sachin, Even if he scores 175, India will lose by 3 runs and people Indians lost because Sachin scored a hundred)

    and nowadays I am not expecting to win in any contests because when I expect to win and lose them, it hurts a lot, demotivates me and keeping me away from blogging world atleast for a week.

    "Expect Less and Smile More is my mantra"

    Happy Man thanks for all the SmileS, The Fool...

    Someone is Special

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  11. @ Rachit

    Rachit, Welcome to Few MileS.. Glad you felt the treat for readers..

    Someone is Special

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  12. @ adreamygal

    Aww, adreamygal, you know what you had done with your comments? You made me fly to cloud nine, thank you thank you thank you...

    Hmmm, huh, next time I will write a Happy Ending Story for you Aarti... and thank you so much for appreciating my efforts in making those reports, googling, Ketamine, KCL and other stuffs.

    Aww, "this is the best fiction I have read from you", Oh "SiS a.k.a", come down the roof will hit you, reply to her comments... Hmmm... happy man, You had increased a day in my life span by making me happy


    Hmmm, Will be happiest man in the world If I am crowned as Blog-a-Tonic. Let’s see whether my hard work is paid...

    Happy Man, thanks for all the SmileS...

    Someone is Special

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  13. @ cloud nine

    cloud nine, the constant support from readers like me make me to write more and more...

    "Fiction at its best”.... ???? Already I am near the roof, have to come down to reply for your comments.. Hmmm.. happy man, You had increased another day in my life span by making me happy

    Happy Man, thanks for your wishes for Blog a ton Crown.. and PS: I will be happy to see you participating...

    Someone is Special

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  14. @ Shilpa Nair

    Glad to hear those words from last month Baton.. Hmm.. Happy Man....

    "Your story was so believable what with all the info on Ketamine, the Autopsy reports!" Thank you thank you thank you for appreciating my efforts..

    Sure, I will consider your feedback, yes If I would have typed in a word processor, it would have been better output here.. Thanks once again..

    Happy Man, thanks for your wishes... and let's see if your prediction comes true..

    Thank you thank you thank you..

    Someone is Special

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  15. i would love to read your novel..

    well written

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  16. Dude some post is really special. As always, excellent narration. And a feel good feeling in your post.

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  17. the best thing you can do for your readers is keep your story unpredictable till the very end, and so you did :) kept me hooked! you paid attention to every detail, and the plot was very interesting.
    keep writing, gonna visit your blog regularly now :)
    cheers

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  18. That was some narration dude! And good plot too. I knew I'd heard the name Ritika somewhere as well..

    Well, this might just get you the badge! :)

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  19. @ Chetan

    Glad to hear those heartfelt words. I will inform once I self publish it and Happy Man... Thanks a lot for you wishes..

    Someone is Special

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  20. @ Siddhesh 'Ravan' Kabe

    Siddesh, the name I love the most.. Hmmm, Glad that someone post is really special.. Thanks.. and as always you boost me with your encouraging words..

    Happy Man, thanks for your sweet words..

    Someone is Special

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  21. @ Hafsah

    Hafsah, Welcome to Few Miles and Blog-a-Ton..


    the best thing you can do for your readers is keep your story unpredictable till the very end, and so you did :) kept me hooked! you paid attention to every detail, and the plot was very interesting.


    I am very Happy to give my best to my readers and Glad it was unpredicatable till the very end.. Thanks for your encouraging words.. and thanks for appreciating my hard work...

    Hmmm, also thanks for following me and Glad you will be regular on my blog.. cheers friend

    Someone is Special

    "Your story was so believable what with all the info on Ketamine, the Autopsy reports!" Thank you thank you thank you for appreciating my efforts..

    Sure, I will consider your feedback, yes If I would have typed in a word processor, it would have been better output here.. Thanks once again..

    Happy Man, thanks for you wishes... and let's see if your prediction comes true..

    Thank you thank you thank you..

    Someone is Special

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  22. @ Leo

    Leo is back to Blog-a-Ton, Happy News for his readers including me...

    Glad it came out well and thanks for the encouraging words Leo. Yeah, you would have heard this name in "Return" & "Three Knots".. Hmm, happy you still remember

    and you know about my luck better dude.. Hmm...

    Thanks for your heart felt words, feeling happy... and special thanks for increasing two days in my life span..

    Someone is Special

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  23. nice mystery story, thriller, crime story, but i felt it was long though. was beginning to guess Neha might have done this, nice narration ! but i think u could have introduced a couple of more characters to confuse things a little bit !

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  24. Love,passion,crime,mystery,afterlife,science all rolled into one..awesome..

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  25. This was awesome...I really din know about your blog and its like God I missed such a wonderful blog earlier...
    This was a nice concept, suspense tragedy love all in one...must say you are one heck of a writer keeps readers glued till the end !
    I will surely read your other posts too when I come back...in fact I shouldn't be here as my exams are gonna start but somehow I logged in... All the best !! :) Take Care.

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  26. @ Jyoti Sharma

    Welcome to Few Miles and Blog-a-Ton Jyoti Sharma..

    "Whoaa Awesome", Glad you felt it awesome and thanks for the encouraging words

    Someone is Special

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  27. @ astrosunilnomy

    Sunil, glad it turned out to be a nice mystery and thriller. Hmm even I felt it too long and your patience is appreciated.

    Couple of more characters? Siddesh, Riti, Neha, Bala (the guy who proposed Riti in collge days as well as police, he might appear as two roles till the very end) and Arun. Do you need more.. ? Hmmm....

    Thanks for your constant support Sunil..

    Someone is Special

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  28. @ Akshay

    Welcome to Few Miles and Blog-a-Ton..

    Love,passion,crime,mystery,afterlife,science all rolled into one..awesome.. YOu made me happy dude, even I didn't realise the post comes in these many categories.. Thank you thank you thank you so much

    Happy Man..

    Someone is Special

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  29. @ Fatima

    Welcome to Few Miles and Blog-a-Ton..

    This was a nice concept, suspense tragedy love all in one...must say you are one heck of a writer keeps readers glued till the end !

    Glad the concept came out well and Happy Man as I could keep you glued till the very end inspite of being such a long post. Thank you so much for the encouraging words and thanks for your wishes too.


    All the best for your exams. Wish you to score well.

    Aww, thank you, I will be happy to know your feedbacks, welcome back soon.. Take good care of yourself and Have a great Sunday..

    Someone is Special

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  30. you write super well.

    it is like a short novel,
    well fine tuned characters.
    blessing your writing...

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  31. Happy Mother’s Day to Moms in your family,
    Wow.
    Blessings…
    You Rock!
    Love your poetry.

    the Perfect Poet Award for you, Thanks for the support!

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  32. @ Jingle a.k.a Promising Poets

    Ji, Happy Mothers Day to one and all..


    it is like a short novel,
    well fine tuned characters.
    blessing your writing...


    Ji, your blessings make me write so well. Short Novel??? Oh my God, you made me fly to sky Ji.. Thank you thank you thank you so much


    ! ~ Happy Mother's Day ~ !

    Aww, thank you for the blessings and as always for your constant support..

    Someone is Special

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  33. @ Jingle a.k.a Promising Poets

    Ji, Perfect Poet Award? Aww.. thank you so much for the blessings and award Ji.. Happy Man

    Someone is Special

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  34. Interesting story, more interesting is the use of HTML script to hide the suspense part...

    Nice one SIS

    Cheers,
    Blasphemous Aesthete

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  35. wow!:)
    what a story!:)you made it even more believable with the reports..
    great work!
    also as i read in your previous comments you are penning down a novel..
    congratulations!you already have a reader eagerly waiting for it!:)
    keep writing!
    cheers!

    p.s-your about me is pretty interesting:)

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  36. @ Blasphemous Aesthete

    Welcome Back Anushul...

    I wanted the readers to be in the story and to think who could be the one who killed her. and Glad it came out well... Happy the idea of hiding the suspense part made it more interesting. Thank you so much for leaving your footprints. Happy Man...

    and three cheers for you for cheering me..

    Someone is Special

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  37. @ tarunima

    Welcome to Few Miles and Blog-a-Ton..


    wow!:)
    what a story!:)you made it even more believable with the reports..
    great work!

    Glad it came out well and happy to make people believe with the reports stuff.. Thank you thank you and I want the readers to be in the story and Happy I could..


    and regarding the Novel, thank you thank you thank you for your encouraging words.. Happy to have a reader like you.. Thank you so much..

    And thank you for your sweet words on my 'About Me'.. Thanks much..

    Someone is Special

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  38. When I first came here to blogger I never knew I could even have as many as 50 readers...I hardly had one reader and that too a friend, it feels good somewhere people read you, appreciate you and even correct you when you go wrong...something I din have earlier...

    This place has given me some wonderful friends and reader too..and now I'm glad a versatile blogger like you too read my work :)

    Well this is the reply I posted on my blog but then realized you might never check that out...and well I really liked the way you write!

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  39. Well done and suspenseful, SiS. Seems you are moving seriously into prose/fiction.

    Good job. Good luck with Blog-a-Thon.

    Jamie :-)

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  40. Wow SiS what a post.. Truly Wonderful .. Even though it was long but it pushed us further to read till the end to find the murderer and what a reveal it was.

    It will be really hard to stop you from winning this time..

    All the Best for BAT-20

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  41. @ Fatima

    Hmm, I read your reply on your blog and really glad and happpy because of you as you came and posted the reply here.. How sweet you are.. a genuine blogger.. Hats of to you..

    Glad you like the way I penned thanks..

    Someone is Special

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  42. @ JamieDedes

    OMG, It is glad to here from a person who won NaNoWriMo thrice.. Such praise always boosts one morale.. Thank you Jamie for all the sweet words..

    Hmm I love poems and I can't stay without it.. Now penning a poem for Mother's Day Jamie.. Meet you @Potluck..

    Thanks once again, Happy Mother's Day..

    Someone is Special

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  43. @ Vikas Khair


    Wow SiS what a post.. Truly Wonderful .. Even though it was long but it pushed us further to read till the end to find the murderer and what a reveal it was.


    Vikas, Glad it kept you glued till the very end to find the murder and thanks for liking the reveal.. Hmm, thank yo so much for all the appreciating words.. I am wordless to reply to you.. :-)


    and thanks for your wishes.. Let's see if luck is with me in this edition..

    Someone is Special

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  44. nice story....i liked the plot...
    i guessed neha could be the culprit reading through, but never expected it to end neha killing the man she loved also.

    dont mistake me there are certain things i want to tell you.....
    the autopsy report ....it wont look like that and there are spells checks to be made in it.......and def they wont mention semen being traced from walls in an autopsy report.


    ketamine is a drug used in anaesthesia i dont think u can get it easily other than u steal it from a hospital.

    lethal dose for kcl is in grams to inject it u need to have a iv line for faster bolus injection or least a huge syringe.

    in either case they would have found the needle mark in vein.

    next both ketamine and high level of kcl can be identified form sampling the blood and tissues for sufficiently longer time..there is high likely a chance they missed it too in autopsy.( if autopsy report suggested ketamine in blood whih u confused there the case wud never be closed as natural death
    )

    next...cardiac arrest they cant simply mention in an report..it is a conclusion they come when they have no other clue in death. ....the cause of arrest is also there to be mentioned if no obvious cause like a coronary block is there then they wud have suspected high kcl dose specially when murder is suspected

    next why did police miss the ketamine bottle in the backyard...even after finding ketamine in blood.

    and i think u cant drug a person and make them have sex..def it can happen only when both are doing it even under drugs influence

    and why is neha so fool to throw the ketamine bottle nearby and why on earth she wud want to inform police... she wanted this to be a natural death then why she wud want sid to be arrested...instead she could have left both there for the night morning it wud have been a natural death...


    nice plot and story man but there are certain flaws...i wud suggest not to get into medical details too much next time

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  45. @ the critics

    Aww, what a way to read a post dude.. I am happy to read all the things you mentioned..

    firstly I am not a doctor, so I am not aware of medicines completely..

    Next..

    1. Ketamine can be easily available as a smuggled drug…

    2. I am not sure of a huge syringe but when I read and even checked the images with Google, it looked like a syringe used for normal injection so I used the same idea

    3. Yeah coming to autopsy, I know how detail it will be. I don’t want to get into detailed autopsy report so just posted a gist of it. Hmmm one of the autopsy report they had even mentioned about the same as I did here. PS: I am not a doctor, a software engineer who tried my hand to write a thriller like this.

    4. Well, great point about ketamine missed by Police, I penned an extra para for it but later removed as it lengthened the post a lot. (You are really a great critic man)

    5. Yeah it is with their will but they are not completely aware of things that happened due to over dosage of drugs..

    6. Neha is not a serial killer or a master killer, she is just a ordinary girl who wants to live with her love (There is a saying in Police department: Criminals will surely leave certain clues without their knowledge because they are not masters. The words are not exactly same but the meaning is same)

    I agree to all your six points and these are my responses to it but this hurts a bit, “...i wud suggest not to get into medical details too much next time”, only if we try our hand at something, we can master in it right. “Unless you do a mistake you can’t learn things..”
    Am I right? Hmm

    Thanks for your patience in reading the complete post and providing me such a great feedback and I am sure from next time I will research completely before trying hands at it..

    Good luck to you and Have a great day.. Good Night..

    Somoene is Special

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  46. SORRY dude............ i didnt mean to be a crtic there.....sure loved ur narration and story just wanted to say the other points too so u cant correct it next time...specially i thought it could help u with ur novel thats why....and leaving out the medical details i said cause u can escape from being pointed out sure u are an software eng and u wudnt have much details on medical side... i am a doc and i cant write much abt software programming....thats why i said so.....i commented that much beacause i wanted the nice plot to have perfect 100 touch... if its someone else writing a simple plot it can afford to have overlook-able flaws..but a entry like that deserves be 100 percent perfect thats why i mentioned all these dont mistake me on anything....happy writing and am waiting for ur novel..good luck

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  47. What a narration sis! You wrote it beautifully with poems and the last link was really a good idea.Overall ,I enjoyed it :)

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  48. Don't say sorry dude... I am happy to find a person who express from his heart.. Very Happy Man.. Seriously, I am very much to read your pinpoints, it will definitely help me to grow and really thanks for helping me.

    Glad to know you are doc, I must say you are considered as God, because you are the people who save us when we are in ill.. Hats off to you..

    Happy you wanted it to be 100% percent even I wanted it to be so.... Hmm, thank you so much and PS from next time I will research 100% percent before writing such posts

    Hmm, the only think hurt me was, 'Don't try your hands', it's ok.. I need a person like you to grow.. Thank you thank you thank you so much dude..

    Someone is Special

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  49. @ UmaAnandane

    Uma, Glad you like the narration and very happy the combo of poems and prose made you love it so much.. Hmmm, thank you and happy because you like the idea of hiding the last part..

    Thank you so much for enjoying it.. Have a great day Uma..

    Someone is Special

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  50. loved the story..:)you shud write a novel dude.. seriously.. and this is awesome..


    "The Blue Sky with thousand trillions of stars,
    Sweetly twinkled on the Milky Way;
    The Morning blossomed thousand millions of daffodils,
    Dancing and smiling in the gentle breeze;
    Cuckoos started singing Unchained Melody,
    With Bees composing Celtic music;
    I wondered why this been happening, but
    Silently the God's sweetest child set foot on earth;
    It is her sweet birthday, and
    She sweetly assured she is my gift"

    a true way to impress GALS :D
    and all the best for BAT:)

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  51. @ Utℏℜa $uresh ~ ℳaking ℰveryday ℳagical

    loved the story..:)you shud write a novel dude.. seriously.. and this is awesome..

    "The Blue Sky with thousand trillions of stars,
    Sweetly twinkled on the Milky Way;
    The Morning blossomed thousand millions of daffodils,
    Dancing and smiling in the gentle breeze;
    Cuckoos started singing Unchained Melody,
    With Bees composing Celtic music;
    I wondered why this been happening, but
    Silently the God's sweetest child set foot on earth;
    It is her sweet birthday, and
    She sweetly assured she is my gift"

    a true way to impress GALS :D


    Glad you loved the story as it came out well. The process is going on.. Let's see when can I complete.. and thank you so much..

    Aww, nice way to impress GALS, is it.. Happy Happy..


    Thank you so much for all your appreciating words and wishes..

    Someone is Special

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  52. It's really kewl...The narration(screenplay)is interesting..I feel it has the content required to make a short film...I am sure one cannot just leave it reading the first 2 paragraphs...good grip on the reader's interest...keep rocking!!!

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  53. @ Ravi

    Aww.. Happy Man Ravi.. Glad the narration was good and it ketp you glued till the very end. Thank you so much for your encouraging words.. Happy..

    It's really kewl...The narration(screenplay)is interesting..I feel it has the content required to make a short film...I am sure one cannot just leave it reading the first 2 paragraphs...good grip on the reader's interest...keep rocking!!!

    Aww, I know you are good short film maker.. I would be happy if you make this a short story.. What say? We can work on it....

    Someone is Special

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  54. heyy a awesomely long post :D wasnt expecting it :) .. it good to see how much study you have actually put in it :) .. you can actually write a novel :D :) you should go for it !!! totally !!!

    All the best for BAT :)
    Keep writing :D :)

    My Blog a Ton Entry

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  55. @ Golden Vulture


    heyy a awesomely long post :D wasn’t expecting it :) .. it good to see how much study you have actually put in it :).


    Aww, thank you so much for appreciating my efforts and happy it came out well, awesomely long, thanks thanks thanks...


    Novel, you can see one from me soon... Hmmm, thank you for encouraging me...

    Thanks for your wishes... and do keep reading my posts...

    Someone is Special

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  56. Wow! I don't see my comment!!!!

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  57. Okay, I'll try again:
    3:16 a.m. in California and sleepily attempting to catch up on Blog-a-Ton before too late. Busy, busy week for me. Phew! I hope you are feeling better...

    SiS, this is amazing for several reason, but probably just that you got such a mystery worked out of one little photograph. Wonderful! An engaging story.

    Blog on, SiS. Never give up ...

    Jamie

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  58. CONGRATULATIONS SIS....See Did I or Did I not tell u of this win......?! :) :)

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  59. WOW! Quite a story you have woven up there, SiS! Niiiiice!! I just wish I could conjure up plots and write stories myself... you inspire me, SiS!!

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  60. @ JamieDedes

    Hmm, Jamie so sweet of you.. Happy to the core.. It is great to see such comments from a NaNoWriMo Winner.. Thank you Jamie.. and also for the vote..

    Someone is Special

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  61. @ Shilpa Nair

    So sweet of you... Thank you Shilpa Nair...

    Someone is Special

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  62. @ Kavita

    Aww, thank you Kavita for your sweet comments.. I will be super glad to read such stories from your pen.. And glad you are inspired...

    Someone is Special

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  63. @ all

    thank you so much for making my dream come true.. thank you sweet hearts for the votes and smiles..Happy Man to be a BATOM

    Someone is Special

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  64. Hi there,

    I have been out of touch with BAT for quite some time, so am delayed in reading your winning post. First, congrats on the win :)

    Second, I must say the poems which you included were awesome and the best part of the whole post for me.

    Third, you could have made the story a bit more taut, since it is a thriller. The storyline oscillated and at places, I found the flow broken. Please check for grammar, since it makes or mars a story. e.g. "phone ringed."

    Hope you keep writing such nice stories :)

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  65. @ Debosmita

    Thank you so much for your encouraging words... Happy Man.. and sure I will clean up my writing for sure..

    Do keep coming..

    Someone is Special

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  66. what a narration...

    bravoooo....

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  67. @ shweta

    what a narration...

    bravoooo....


    What a sweet comment.. I am flying..

    Someone is Special

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  68. wow...spell bound! ...liked it a lot! :)

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  69. @ ashzzes

    wow...spell bound! ...liked it a lot! :)

    Thank you thank you thank you....

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  70. This is very detailed. I liked the details you brought here. I think I need to learn a lot from you.

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  71. @ Saru Singhal

    This is very detailed. I liked the details you brought here. I think I need to learn a lot from you.

    Glad you liked the details.. Happy!

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  72. I have no words to comment on this post...This is marvelous, fabulous, fantabulous... I agree with everyone, just pen down your novel SIS... In the starting I became sad that the two are separated but despite of such end I am happy that wherever they are, they are with each other, cause the pain of losing the one you love is unbearable... Once again Loved it... There is no other place to go when you have "Few Miles" God Bless you SIS ...!!!

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